Hello! While there is nothing wrong with your topic per se , there are a few things you could do to improve this article.
1) Create longer and more detailed sentences
2) Fix your grammar and spelling mistakes ( I.E. you misspelled first, decided, and lessons)
3) I would suggestion using more vivid adjectives :)
Just my two cents :)
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