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Review of Painted Cards  
Review by Aubrey waters
Rated: E | (3.5)
i really did enjoy this and look forward to your next posting.
your use of visual aid was clear and easy for me understand. in the first paragraph when you spoke of the season, i felt like i was there experiencing it and could visualize it myself. also your way of making Oliver seem constantly in a lost state was very easy for me to personally relate to and therefore made him more real to me.
i did notice that sometimes they way you told me how Oliver was feeling did confuse me and i had to reread a few sentences.
also in the very last paragraph of chapter 2 where he passes out is a bit confusing, but it was also a very well written part if that makes any sense, because i felt like he himself didn't know what was happening just like i didn't. and i love how you end the chapter, i really made me want to see what happens next.
overall i do like this it is very well written in my opinion. keep writing, good job!
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