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Review of Ice Cream Truck  
Review by Utopian
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a nice piece. You could expand on the idea and add some more to it. As it stands right now, the story is a tad too short. Probably, you could add some detail - like what course the girl was studying for, or have a flashback to her childhood.
You've got a good theme, some rework will add more spark to it.
Keep writing,
Utopian
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Review of Unforgiving Sea  
Review by Utopian
Rated: E | (3.5)
You've used your imagination very well here. Great job there, the only grouse I have is the piece had too many words which I had to look up in the dictionary. That did break the flow of the piece for me.
As a writer, one often likes to use rich words in a piece (I have been guilty of that too). But I guess this needs to be toned down if one were to appeal to a wide readerhip.
And you can write well even without using arcane words. "This once placid entity, which flirted with the Vikings, massaging them with her silky cream wisps, was well-nigh to turn the tides." is a nice example of that.
Do keep writing, it will hone your craft.
Regards,
Utopian
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Review of Our Separate Ways  
Review by Utopian
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for sharing and being so honest. I can identify with the way you feel. I too had a close band of friends while in my teens. But I guess you need to have a lot of common interests to stay friends(I think even this piece somewhere stressed upon that).
Yea, and time does change everything.

Keep writing,
Utopian
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Review by Utopian
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is nicely written. Kept me engaged right till the end. I liked the way you have introduced the central character - very distinct and nicely etched. The story doesn't have much depth but that's more than made up by the attention to detail, and also the sensitivity you show in each character.
On the flipside, you could have a second look to fix the typo errors.
Great work and keep writing.
Utopian
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Review of Tears of Emotion  
Review by Utopian
Rated: E | (5.0)
An amazing poem, nice ideas, neat language. There's nothing I'd want to change about it.
Keep up the good work.
Malcolm
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