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Review of Ocean  
Review by Mccr8
Rated: E | (3.0)
Reads very well Ladii! Funny how we can see so much more clearly when reading the works of others compared to our own. I'm not sure that "reflections have shown how we cap sided" has created a clear visual for me personally. The two words "reflections and cap sided" probably just don't quite tie-in together.
Also, "I stand to my feet to walk towards" may read more smoothly as "I stand to my feet and walk towards". Just an opinion.
Love the depth. Don't stop putting 'em out there for us.
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Review by Mccr8
Rated: E | (4.0)
This piece is very sweet with a nice touch of humor. I prefer rhyming poems because I find them so much easier to read...more smooth. I'm not sure why, but for some reason I found this particular poem to be a bit of a choppy read.
Wishing you continued writing success!
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Review by Mccr8
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this read! Just one note if you don't mind, you may want to proofread for grammar (some words should have been plural).
Example: 'Many season (s) you give children joy.', '...other time times you bring them treasure (s)'.
Just in case you want to enter this baby in a contest.

Great job overall :)
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