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Review of Southern Woods  
Review by Kyle
Rated: E | (4.0)
It's a pretty nice poem, definitely better than most. However, you seem to get into the focus of your poem only in the last few lines (unless I'm missing something, which is definitely possible.) I get that the central theme is the walk in the woods, but what about God allowing you to see it? What's so special about him doing that? Or perhaps a little more focus on the personification of the woods (I really loved the laughing river - I've never heard any comparison like it!)

Poetry isn't my favorite, but I this poem is definitely one of the top 20 I've ever read. (Which is mainly due to the fact that I love your personification.)

Overall, if you just went slightly more in-depth, it'd be 4.5 or 5.0.

Great job!
-Kyle
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Review of The Photograph  
Review by Kyle
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It's an overall really nice piece. However, I did notice a few things.

"It would be several hours before the sun burnt the vapors off allowing the warming rays to engulf us"

This sentence seemed slightly confusing to me, I asked "What vapors?" for a while.

"and the scenery was bland as hell. "


I think it'd sound better without "as hell."

". He asked our address so he could send a copy of the picture after he developed it. "


He asked FOR our address.


Just a couple of things I noticed. Keep writing!
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Review of Voodoo Madness  
Review by Kyle
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
You capture the spooky and evil theme perfectly - and without it being fake or corny! I especially liked the "all of you deserve to lose" line, it was great (and, to be honest, I laughed a little at it. Is that wrong? =P (Wasn't laughing at your writing, but rather at the topic of the poem.))
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