this is a very powerful poem about addiction. I haven't been adicted to anything, but after reading this poem I feel like I have. You used powerful words and variation in rhythm to make the poem sound somewhat analytical yet very personal. I love it. Keep writing, slight!
This is amazing. I love how you use a variation of line length in the fina stanza. For example,
"Maybe there's a chance for love in my heart again
But I'm still loving you"
It makes it feel like you're thinking it through, like you're looking at the likliness of the chance your heart has, but you quickly change your mind when you remember you're still in love with the subject.
Also, the repition of "again" makes it clear how much you long for the relationship to return, but the contrast when you say "would only tear me apart once more", using "once more" in stead of again, shows your confusion and contrasting emotions.
It's an incredibly sad poem and brings tears to my eyes. You're a great writer, Goldnluna. Keep writing and merry christmas.
xox
Elise
This is a very powerful poem about an immense faith. It reminds me of my Mum, who's suffered with MS for 14 years and is on new medication that's making other people better but making her worse so she can no longer walk. Yet she continues to inspire others with her faith in God and persistent prayer. Thank you so much for this poem and baring your heart to inspire others!
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