I'd say this was a decent poem for children/young kids to read in a church setting, compared to a longer poem for more mature people it was rather easy, but based on your previous works that appears to be a trend for your works. In the future I would try to make your poems slightly longer (by about 1 more section) overall it gets the lesson across and is worth sharing with kids.
This was a clever little poem. One thing that I found especially clever was alphabetising the first column, namely that each one has a respective letter. The segment where words were misspelled personally doesn't appeal to me, but I won't knock points off for that, however, I found that the "X" and "K" rows could have choose a better first word. I found grammar and mechanics to be decently well handled. Overall a decent poem. 4.5/5.
I like the innocent approach to this, it really shows what a child would be like I especially like the demonstration of how many toys babies/children get, as well as how often it seems they use diapers. The meals certainly were a great reflection on the options babies eat.
This work has a nihilistic approach ending shortly as if nothing matters and may be a source of worry to concern that the author has given up hope of change, in this poem no suggestion or solution is given it is a decently written start but nothing more.
The ways this was formated appears to suggest that this was a school assignment for high school. This highlights several facts and statistics, however in terms of formal research most sources are wikipedia and the citations do not follow a formal citation Method (Ex. MLA or APA). I do deduct harshly due to this.
There was an event which transpired this came off with a hint of reaction to that event and a hint of coping. It sounds like a relationship that may have been harmful that one may need to get out of or perhaps it was a rush of young love letting one get into a relationship way to quickly.
I'm not family with this style of poem but from a storytelling perspective it's done well. the spelling is done well. the Grammar looks well done. I had a similar story my dad does the same things. though I tried drinking it but never got used to it. thanks for bringing back nostalgia.
this starts out very relatable to anyone then goes into something of an adventure. the thoughts on this are very thought provoking Ex: I to wonder what would happen if I made different decisions. I really like this 5/5
I feel that this is a common trap many fall into of course I'm referring to the message. one thing people need to do is move on. this is a thing a lot of people seem to face. but don't fret life goes on. anyway the grammar and spelling was well done. I just don't feel the same way about the message.
For a 13 year old this is quite good. the grammar is quite good. the message is something applicable to everyone. the biggest issue I can see is it's a bit short. the idea behind this was taking something we all know and making a poem about it. your ideas are good.
I looked at your poem and noticed you used no/hardly any grammar. None of the words were capitalised and not periods or other hand marks were used. You have a good idea but the bad grammar is a huge turnoff. There is a spot that looks like you skipped a bit of the story. This just feels really incomplete.
this is a sad poem. the rhymes add to it. as a Christian we are called to keep such vows. in this society it feeds on the sinful act of cheating. you did the right thing. the rhyming was excellent. this was well written are around. there are probably some people going to give this crap for bad reason. it's well written IMO.
Interesting take on this famous story.I saw you had several decent rhymes. the grammar was well done. a preference of mine would be if the verses referenced would be on top. the poem flows extremely well. I like the use of formatting it suits this poem well.
I'm not a huge sports buff but...I really liked this poem. the format of this poem was done well! the rhymes are very creative at times "rhythm" and "get'em" I would have never thought of using those to rhyme. if the quality of work you put in was used to describe sports I'd watch them more.
I really like your format. your plunge into the spiritual while done a lot puts a new spin on it for me. I like how this is a huge metaphor it's very creative. your spelling looks decent. I like the use of poetry. poetry I find is often quite difficult and you did it well.
I'm not sure how this has to do with cramps. I see the formatting was done correctly. Your grammar is non-existent. Either Periods, question marks or exclamation marks should be used after each sentence. If your unsure google is a good tool to use. Your spelling is ok some capitalisation is an issue but otherwise most words are spelled correctly. Your story also seems like it's the section in the middle of a bigger story.
It fits the category of short story well. Your grammar is mostly correct. Quotation marks are recommended instead of apostrophes. You establish the topic quickly tell your story in an understandable manner. Your creative use of metaphors is quite the plus, overall a good story
This poem I find to be extremely short. The grammar what little there is was done well. It's obvious that this poem is about putting mulch on ones yard. It's an activity that everyone does. This poem for what little there is makes it hard to tell if it's good or bad.
I'm just going to say that this poem seemed quite sparse. sometimes when I read stuff it doesn't get to the point quickly enough. this got right out to the point. the poem it was supposed to be talking about computers but it seemed to personified to be a computer. the grammar what little there is was well done.
Well let's see here the grammar is well done. I could tell you are missing someone. you are clear in this poem that your missing someone very dear to your heart. it's very easy to understand that's good. the pacing fells a bit off. one of the paragraphs is bigger then all the others. I'd recommend working on that.
The focus on the words rhyming was done well. you focused a bit on telling a story, which I've found is harder to do in poem, the story though it feels a tad incomplete. Is that what you intended? I personally am not a fan of that style of writing but some might be. I felt the grammar was overall decent.
I found many of the rhymes to be very creatively done. the poem is a tad on the short side I found. I noticed your attention to grammar was well done.It looks like all the words were spelled correctly. The bringing in of the seasons was a good call. overall I noticed no major qualms with this poem.
"harshest" this was an example of incorrect grammar having a person read over a work helps pick up mistakes like this. I'm sure you learned this but just in case you didn't it helps. other then that the emotions in this story are well done. the writing itself is well done.
I noticed some dashes are misused. for example over-anxious looks better then overanxious. and on the third line ellipses would probably be a better choice then a dash. there are several minor errors like this that add up. then again perhaps these are just things so minor that it could be the spelling used in the alternative variant of the English language.
I felt this poem a tad on the short side. it ended quite quickly. adding another couple of paragraphs would help.
on a positive note I felt the details were done well. the story's plot was simple yet very well done aside from being a tad to brief. the plot doesn't have to be complex. the simplicity of the day to day life of a fishermen is told here. its a special day told in a matter of minutes.
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