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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
It was very well written in my opinion grammatically speaking, however, to be honest, the end was a little corny. You could simply end it with "they had found the body of fresh water." and that would still have the impact you're looking for without misleading your audience. Just my honest opinion.


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