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Rated: E | (4.0)
As a pianist, I can at least partially feel where the poem comes from... wow. It's really beautiful!

The one place I can find that might benefit from revision is the third stanza, "I was eleven when you first / Came to me..." The 'came to me' sounds uneven, not as flowing as the other lines did. Maybe "I was eleven when you / First came to me"? However, it's your poem.

Very lovely, all in all.

Aster
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