The Story line opened with the words: I have a crush on you. This helped to pull me in, to want to read more about what was happening. In your writing you brought to life Jill, what she was thinking and why. I could feel her becoming anxious for answers, her desire building and her imagination taking over. The story line flowed smoothly. Good ending.
As a parent of two daughters who are now 19 and 16. I agree with you. The most important thing that we can do is love our children and love them without conditions. There are many challenges that we will face as they grow. We may never fully understand why they do what they do. But by loving them we will be there when they really need us. It is something that we all need to learn.
Your story shows the great love that this young man has for his Grandfather but also the great conflict of wanting to help him with the pain and suffering. The conflict is between his moral values that he was raised with and the desire to ease his grandfather's suffering. It was well written and really touched my heart for both the young man and his grandfather
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