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Review of The Glass Mask  
Review by Jacaranda
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a very thought-provoking poem. I like the imagry you use throughout the piece, contrasting the heavy mask everyone wears to the public and the fragile one you never remove.

I also like how each stanza serves a different purpose and has a different feel: a statement, a reflection of the statement onto yourself, the introduction of a second idea, and then a question.

I your choice of vivid words such as "opaque." I also like the rhythm of the third stanza and the use of alliteration ("the careful curves and facets").

The last line is completely unexpected and stays with me.

I do have one grammatical suggestion: In the first stanza, I think you should say "if their true nature IS known," since you used "will" in the previous line. This threw me off a bit at the beginning and seemed to interrupt the flow a bit.

I also have a couple of questions:
The first stanza reads very much like prose. Is this intentional, and, if so, why did you choose to write it this way?
Does the glass mask represent the way we hide our true selves even from those we love, or does it represent the way we hide from ourselves the way our loved ones see us? Or does it represent both or neither?

I really liked this poem, and it made me sit and think about life, and studying it helped me look at my own writing. Please keep writing, and good luck!
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