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Review by SKYone
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! Well done with this text, it is impressive.

I allow myself to leave a comment as there was something that tilt in my head.
If I well understood your tale about the way our "world" works, I felt there was something missing.
This thing would be life, and the fact that life isn't eternal.

I saw you were talking about time, space, consciousness and causality, but without addind any notion of "life" which I think bind everything.
Time is important because we don't have enough, and we react to our environment and evolve with it because we could miss something, or die?
I don't think what Im trying to say is clear enough but this may me futile as your story is not really correlated to the mind.

the best text I read on this site for now!
Good luck with your writings!
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Review by SKYone
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi,

The way you described the scenery is very intense! I liked it, and I say that cause I actually don't like when there is too much room for descriptive content.

My only problem here is that I don't find the reason to this situation. I understood why it happened but It would have been great to enhance this part with more details.

Anyway, that was great, I will look at your other texts!

SKYone
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