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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi Neil Clair


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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*Lightning2* Impression: For your fan fiction based short story piece titled, "It's Jackie Freakin Quinn" the deranged daughter of Harley Quinn, the sometimes paramour of the Joker but she's not been seen much since her daughter emerged on the scene. It was a simple day with Harley out on a balance beam one hundred feet in the air with her six year old daughter who fell and knocked all of the inhibiting sides of her brain loose and opened up everything deranged.

*Heart* What I loved: The story of the Harley Quinn can live on now in the life of her only child, Jackie, who is especially crazy and disconnected to doing what is "right". What's right is what is best for Jackie, as she has been taught by Harley so there isn't any reason to believe she'd do anything different.


*Leafr* What needs work: There is nothing that needs work in this story.


*Note1*Final thoughts: It's always a good thing to see a new villain offering from the Quinn family and I know this is going to only burn brighter and brighter. Best wishes in the contest.



I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Broken Silence  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Sorji


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: For your fan fiction genre choice, you chose the video game, Silent Hill, and the Pyramid Head as your main protagonist. For starters, you definitely chose a subject that gives me chills when I think of it. Your short story entry, "Broken Silence" is a creepy entry for this contest and I can tell you that anything that has to do with Silent Hill, for me, is always frightening. I love the way you handled some of the themes and the content of the game, the grey children, oooh, I remember them once I read the words. It is both sad, and blood chilling at the same time.


What I liked most: I really enjoyed your imagery, as I haven't seen the video game in years. It is an older game but I heard they are bringing it back with the new graphics capability, it is gonna corner the market.

What I liked least: As I usually state, I don't like it cause most short stories don't have a part 2 so I can keep on reading about the character, but maybe I should step back from this one while I have a chance.


Closing thoughts: I must applaud your work and your writing. I am not really a reader of frightening pieces but of course for the judging, I did and now I'm chilled to the bone with fear. What a specularly frightening character but you do this so well. Best wishes in the contest.


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of I, Data  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Sam N. Yago


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: For your fan fiction genre entry, you chose to adapt it from the Star Trek series and use the droid "Data" as your basis for your short story entry, "I, Data". I guess, for starters, I never saw Data like his Data and boy was he a lady killer or something. There was some interesting and mind groping parts but the ending is the stomach puncher. I found comedy in this entry and I do hope it was added there as I found myself chuckling with some of the humor throughout.


What I loved: I thought this entry decided to play with attraction and gender normalness in the bedroom which I found to be a titillating addition to the story. The ending was a HOOT! No more said than that.

What needs work: I normally state that most short stories leave me hanging because there is no more to read but I must keep hope alive.

Closing thoughts: Your short story, "I, Data" ended up being a surprise addition and I like being surprised by entries that I hadn't expected to exist in the contest. Fortunately for you, your entry is one of these writings. Best of luck in the contest.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: For your fan fiction genre writing you chose the young adult genre with the Twilight book series as your backdrop. The story has a main protagonist of a wolf who is speaking to a vampire, as in the Twilight series. The story read fairly simply and for those who like to be reminded that we read Twilight, this will be a fond throwback to a simpler time of teenage dreams.


What I liked most: I thought you handled the genre like a pro and slipped back, taking the rest of us with you, to the time of the height of the Twilight series phenomena. You chose to highlight the wolf side over the vampire and settle on the story with Leah in it. I thought it was well shown as I scarcely recall the character but your interpretation brought back a memory or two.

What I liked least: As I have found myself saying, I don't dislike the writing but the lack of more writing to show what is happening with the characters, but I can keep hope alive.


Closing thoughts: As I stated earlier that your interpretation and reanimation of the Twilight series in most of our minds was a welcome bypass to a time of youth and folly. Good times, right? Good times! Good luck in the contest!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Bond's Last Stand  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Odessa Molinari


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: For your fan fiction spy mystery genre piece you wrote a story titled, Bond's Last Stand, which shows a Bond who is a retired and shuttered off into the nearest retirement home for retired spies. Though Bond can't move or flip like his younger self might do, he still had the charisma that drew so many admirers to him and to his bed. I thought you presented a retired Bond with class and finesse not taking away from his title but adding a bit of spunk for his final stand.

What I liked most: I was impressed how you phrased and framed the main protagonist, Bond, not as a frail senile man with not long to go before his final trip to the Big gun house in the sky but a man who still had the "IT".

What I liked least: I always feel a lil sad when a story is written well but there isn't more but I can always hope that there will be someday.


Closing thoughts: Great work on this story and for the creativity to keep the story interesting and not bore the reader with a lack luster entry. I thought you did a wonderful writing today. Best wishes in the contest.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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In affiliation with Circle of Sisters  
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Mara ā™£ McBain


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: For your fan fiction short story, A Sight for Sore Eyes, we are introduced to your main protagonist, John Dutton, straight from the hit show, Yellowstone (I'm a HUGE fan too!) and this new eye candy, Cyn a blast from his past stopping in to stir things up for a few minutes. I thought this story moved smartly but cleverly along, keeping both the interest and the attention of the reader. This was a very well handled piece of writing for your entry.


What I liked most: I thought that the story, though based on something airing currently, this didn't feel as if it couldn't be a script for next week's show storyline. The characters, the John Dutton and family, are likeable and relatable characters and the Cyn character will fit in perfectly, like a well fitting shoe.

What I liked least: The only thing I find that I dislike when a story is reading well, I dislike that there isn't more story to read.


Closing thoughts: I think that you are on to something with these characters and this fan fiction foray. We can't get enough of the show and some well written stories about the Duttons might have to suffice once the season runs out. Definitely enjoyed reading your writing and best of luck in the contest.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Chris24


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My overall opinion: What an interesting foray into the science fiction with your short story entry, "The First Starfighter", with a fighter who thinks he is retired until he is thrust back into the fight in order to live. The fighter, Alex Rogan, has taken to alcohol and sleeping in days, is alerted to a new danger from an unexpected source that rocks his world.

Your spelling and grammar: I really enjoyed the movement and flow of this writing. It really kept me engaged from start to finish.

What I liked most: The main protagonist was tightly written and had a good balance around him in the writing. I didn't feel any lags or stunted parts to his telling of the story.

What I liked least: There was nothing to dislike about this story.


An editing suggestions: none.


Closing thoughts: This is a plausible story of science fiction if space flight and intergalactic space travel were real but in spite of this, I felt like this was entirely possible since the story was written so strong. Good luck to you in the contest!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Name of Names  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Mastiff


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: This is a review for your short story, Name of Names, in which we meet a protagonist who is the last of his kind surviving in the Zombie apocalypse and because he began his journey so young with his father, he states that he is known by the name Jesus, and tied him stepping outside of a burial area, he appeared to mimic Jesus from the Bible.

What I loved: Your cleverness and ingenuity in this story and working to tie some ideas together for this short story, I give you a Hug.

Your spelling and grammar: This wasn't an area that needed improving on.


What needs work: I think you were tying the survival idea and his ability to survive to the idea that he had a Jesus like quality, possibly supernatural. I felt you wrote like your main protagonist was a lucky guy and nothing else and I have a hard time believing in this horrible hard hearted time of human history they would recall Jesus without reading and where are the books? These type of ideas fall away as society crumbles as it would in this type of scenario, which I felt wasn't strong enough for the main intent of your story, in my opinion.


An editing suggestions: none.


Closing thoughts: So, I think your ideas in some parts are clever and intriguing and I struggled to tie some of the others together. This is only my humble opinion and not to be taken for more than this. Good luck in the contest!

I liked reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Trick or Treat  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi C.E.Wilder


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: For your fan fiction genre choice you chose to write a story titled, Trick or Treat, which featured the antics of Lock, Stock and Barrel from The Nightmare Before Christmas movie and your take on this trio was interesting indeed!

Your spelling and grammar: There weren't any misspelled words or awkward sentences to be found in the your short story, so bravo!

What I liked most: I thought this group of Halloween scallions were delightfully scary from the movie but I never anticipated seeing them in a standalone fiction piece that actually ventured into introspective musings and ponderings of this trio's final estate in life. I thought it was well done!

What I liked least: I wished that this story could continue as we learned more about their further melding within this new environment and changing who they were in order to adapt.


Closing thoughts: I truly liked your entry and your new take on these characters for further development outside of the Nightmare Before Christmas. Wish you the best for your story today.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Steve Joos }


I am reviewing your entry as a judge for
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My overall opinion: This short genre story fixed about the storyline of the television show "MASH" which was popular in the 70s, and sadly I know the show this brings back such nostalgia! The name of your main protagonist, Maj. Charles Emmerson Winchester III, and his sister, Miss Honoria Winchester, must mean something but I'm missing it but I will give you nods for the cleverness. I think this will be an enjoyable choice for readers of your work.

Your spelling and grammar: I did not see any issues in this area so nothing to say.

What I liked most: The wit, the tongue in cheek of the and the choice of last names (Winchester) was a delightful to read. The movement of the work, you kep things interesting and engaging for the reader.

What I liked least: I really did not have anything to dislike about your writing.


Suggestions: None to offer but to keep up the great work!

An editing suggestions: none.


Closing thoughts: The Army show "MASH" which was a favorite for many reason was a good choice for you today as I read through your work. It's not a choice I would have made but I'm not as clever with these types of work plays so kudos to you!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Shelf  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi BirdSeedSteve

This is a review for your humorous poem, "Shelf" and now onto the review. Which, I may add, will be taken well for an critique is meant to help and not alarm. Okay, enough platitudes, back to the review.


Impression: What a witty poetry piece expressing thoughts and exhultations towards the versatile piece of furniture...the shelf. I think it takes a creative mind to look at an inanimate item like this to conjure together words that are pleasant and bring grins to the readers face. Like mine. This was such a pleasure to read today!

*Heart* What I loved: I loved the simple complexity of this short writing. I am not fooled by the well written short piece because it takes a deft hand to do this well. I loved being surprised like this by a writing! Great work!

*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing, absolutely nothing here needs improvement.


*Note1*Final thoughts: What a fun writing I came across this morning! Thank you so much for this opportunity to rate and review your work this morning.


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In affiliation with Noticing Newbies Committee  
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi Prosperous Snow celebrating

This is a sitewide random review for your poem, "The Impetus for Creation" and I hope it is either helpful or creates laughter, one or the other, I'd be happy to know this took place when you opened and read it. Okay, without all of this adieu, let's move on to the review.


Impression: Wow! This poem really strives to go deep in the outer limits in its thought provocation and word arrangement. I really was very pleased to make it to its ending and still have my thinking intact. I liked it, very much. Though I have a disagreement on the Creation of the universe , outside of this poem, I think the thought inducements work wonderfully well. I felt as if I could ramble further but unless it was to help or compliment, I need to move on.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved how you bounced various word meanings, simply and skillfully, off one another in this melody of poetic dance. What a pleasure to read this work.

*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing at all needs work within this piece.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I truly am happy that I found this poem today and was able to provide it with a rate and review. Thank you so much for sharing this writing with us all.


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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi AbbyOlson

This review is for your flash fiction challenge story, "The Mansion in the Woods" and I hope this review is somewhat helpful or enlightening. Probably not, but I still hope so!

Impression: This story involves a young girl and a young boy who decide to visit a reputed haunted mansion in the woods and within minutes of their arrival, they are frightened up out of the mansion. It was according to the challenge of writing about a old mansion from what I could surmise but as a piece of writing, it was decidedly met the challenge. But that is all from what I read.

*Heart* What I loved: When I left this writing, I was pretty much done because there wasn't much to it. Maybe that was all that was required but then it will leave readers wondering and using conjecture to answer unanswered questions. So, sadly, I didn't leave it feeling good either.

*Leafr* What needs work: I'm sure that you fulfilled all the requirements of the entry for the flash fiction entry but it just felt like it was the beginning of a larger story. Maybe it is. I don't know and I'm not telling you to write one.

*Note1*Final thoughts: So, I thought your writing really hit the mark for the flash fiction entry in telling of the trip two teens made to a mansion in the woods. Great job in that area and congrats on your entry!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Ruth E


I am reviewing your entry,"I'm Sorry I Didn't Take Action", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: This is a solid essay type entry in an apologetic yet purposeful style of writing. The main voice, a woman known as Ruth, is a youth club volunteer/site leader who wrote a tearful confession of non-action that will only be action going forward to her young club attendees. This was more of a story of a woman who lived in a world where she rarely got to rub shoulders with those who could affect legislation for the youth clubs, and she missed her shot by choosing to be silent in a time when silence was not needed. I liked the purposefulness of the story and thought it was well though through.


What I liked most: What I liked was the sense of accountability and responsibility she felt towards these children who came to the center for respite. I felt that she probably will speak to them when she the chance arrives and she'd really let them know what is wrong and what can be done to improve the situation.
What I liked least:

Your spelling and grammar: There were some iffy moments throughout the piece that if it is edited for spelling, punctuation and sentence sense, it will be an easy fix.

Closing thoughts: This was a good writing about a person who didn't the situation right, though they knew it was needful but they moved on from it with a renewed sense of purpose. Thought this was a solid entry for the contest!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Daring Greatly  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi debmiller1


I am reviewing your entry, "Daring Greatly", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: I am just a great admirer of Western fiction or non-fiction because when I read it, I realize that I am not that type of person at all. I do wish I were:fearless, adventurous, willing to go into unknown territory, etc. No, that's not me, but I love reading Western themed stories and most, like yours, do not disappoint. It's the story of a young child of 14, which was old in that time, was left to care for their five other siblings. Father got hurt on the Oregon trail, Mother had died along on the journey so it was up to them to carry on to the "Promised land." The story, I felt utilized the quotation prompt quite well as it was all grit if you successfully made it through those mountains and trails to your destination. Very nice start to an interesting Western story about bravery and resilience.

What I liked most: I really liked the story content and the tension involved when the kids lost their father, who lay dying for days before expiring in night. What is always captured my attention is that many of these stories are drawn from real life adventures and that is awesome! This story really engaged me till the end, making me want more of this Daring adventures.

What I liked least: As usual, when I get involved in a story, I am sad to see it end so I hope there will be more of the adventures of this young lad's quest to find gold in California.

Your spelling and grammar: There was nothing to highlight in the writing.

Closing thoughts: I think you wanted to write a story for the contest but what I hope will happen is that you keep on writing about this character and the siblings trials on the Oregon Trail and the lad who is heading to California...we want to know more about his too! You seem to have started something that I hope you will finish with more writing. Good luck in the contest!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi The Sun SmilesOn Small Valley }


I am reviewing your entry, "A Desperate Contestant", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: This was a short and heartwarming story of a young man who for as long as he remembered, lost out in an important writing contest. The story alludes to the idea his mother, his support, is not there with him through this struggle, and he feels blocked on all sides. This story made a great use of the quotation prompt and aspired to build the story and theme around the prompt. It shows throughout and makes this a stellar entry.

What I liked most: I liked how the writer melded the quotation prompt into the storyline and it never felt forced, but flowed naturally.

What I liked least: I always tend to want more writing when stories are interesting and with this one, I liked least that it was so short. I do hope you add more content to this entry.

Your spelling and grammar: There were some spots in the story where there was questionable use of some words, punctuation and the making up of a word reechoed? to make it fit, I'm not sure was a good move. However, I'm just pointing out that you might go back through your entry, recheck the document for the areas I stated and you will be good to go!

Closing thoughts: What a light hearted entry that started out with the main character on the losing side and what a turn of events as the story progresses...A fun reading and hope to see more work from you.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Timid souls  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Angustia }


I am reviewing your entry, "Timid Souls", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: Oh, what a bit of a rollercoaster mind trip you take us on with your story based on the quotation prompt and you definitely stay within the parameters for this entry. It is a story with the curiously odd main character named Li who spends time with an aunt with money but whose home is infested with bugs. I thought the bugs might be the timid souls the writer hinted at since they were mentioned so early in the story, but since have found they are not...oops! The story is mostly built around this character, her aunt, and the wild humans who are hunted and killed onscreen for viewing entertainment since the climate catastrophe that sent millions of humans who didn't work or who couldn't recover from the disaster outside of the protected limits of American cities and the explorers, the normal humans who were the accepted side were the hunters for televised entertainment. It's pretty trippy reading and I thought the text was paced good for enjoyment.


What I liked most: This was a good story with a dark element to it. The killing of humans who haven't conformed, oh, makes for a good story and this is one of them.

What I liked least: I hated that the story..I wanted to know more about this struggle between the wild humans and the hunters and felt like I won't.

Your spelling and grammar: There were no issues in this area for this story.


Closing thoughts: Ooo, very good story that made me glad I'm here under the calm times. And glad that this is a writing of fiction.


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Author Ed Anderson


I am reviewing your entry, "The Inheritance Game", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: This little story was more of a sexual romp with the players all trying to discover who is going to sleep with who than uncovering who murdered the rich millionaire. It starts out from with a group of seemingly random people who each receive a postcard with their name and directions to help solve the murder of a rich man and whoever solves the murder will receive $50 million dollars. It ends with most of the characters sexually involved with one another, and though we find out who killed the rich man, it didn't read like the header promised. It fell a bit flat for me, as well as, not really keeping with the quotation prompt content/idea showing a someone struggling through or has struggled through to achieve the dream. But this are just my thoughts and my view of this story.


What I liked most: I think what I liked most was when the story opened and the main character, Jacob(?) received his postcard and it looked as if we were moving onto a rag to riches kind of story. It felt hopeful towards that idea, in the beginning.

What I liked least: For me, I liked least when the story deviated from what it initially showed might be the idea/thought process to a soft porn romp which really didn't seem to fit for this contest, in my opinion.

Your spelling and grammar: There were no spelling or grammar errors in the writing, so yay there!

Closing thoughts: A few parts looked hopeful, for a short part of the writing but the story diverted and went a different path that wasn't in line with showing the content of the quotation prompt for me. Keep on writing and getting your work out there.


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi PureSciFi }


I am reviewing your entry, "SpacePlanet Tonkim", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: This sci-fi story of a traveling SpacePlanet of Tonkims led by their Leader, Dimcea, who is a flawed alien and keeps as her 2nd in command, another alien named Kallic. The story is mainly about how this Dimcea no longer is loved by the citizens and many want her dead. She plans to do the yearly state of the SpacePlanet meeting but her 2nd warns her to drop the part about a force field. She refuses to and there the drama begins. There's not much action, mainly dialogue and a surprising ending to wrap it all up. I thought this story utilized much of the quotation prompt idea as the basis and it helped to drive the content.



What I liked most: What I liked the most about the story was the surprise ending. It worked well and brought the whole idea around circle. Thought it worked well.

What I liked least: I didn't see anything that I disliked about the story.

Your spelling and grammar: I did not see any spelling or grammar issues in this story.


Closing thoughts: Sometimes it pays to listen to the people in your employ; they can help you and possibly keep you alive. This seems to be the idea in this story. Don't get too big to listen cause you might miss out on the warning!


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Christopher Roy Denton


I am reviewing your entry, "The Novice Vampire Hunter", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: What a fun little story with complete with a soldier named Jeremy, the local magistrate Stephen and some stories of the local farmer's husband with bit marks on his neck. The two main characters of Jeremy and Stephen, might they be called Laurel and Hardy(?) in their approach to investigating and nabbing a vampire with all the expertise of the Keystone coppers, set out to lie in wait for the vampiress that is hunting in their neck of the woods. Jeremy spies a breathtaking damsel, replete with all the entrapments needed to snag anyone she pleased, and is immediately caught by her spell. They hunt for her, they find her, one of them gets hurt in the process and a funny turn of events happens to make this a happy ending. Now, I did try to find how this tied in with the quotation prompt and I think it lightly tied some points, but just enough to touch on the meaning of the prompt. This story was plenty entertaining and made me chuckle in some parts, so that's good for me.

What I liked most: I liked the part where they go into the crypt and search and find where the vampiress is sleeping, and surprise, she isn't sleeping! That would be more than a bit of a surprise for me and I thought it worked for the story content.

What I liked least: There was nothing that I disliked about this story.

Your spelling and grammar: Happily, I can say that there were no spelling or grammar errors in this story.


Closing thoughts: It makes me glad that we don't actually live with vampires but if we did, we I'd think these two would make a good team to help rid or introduce new vampires into the world, whatever works. Again, I thought your story was a jolly fun romp and I hope to read more work from you.


I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi sindbad


I am reviewing your entry, "Information Warfare", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: Wow! This story of how Information Warfare, not the actual warfare, is the problem in this war game, is really strong in setting up your argument for change. I knew we were in for some tense passionate writing when I read the words, "We are killing terrorists. Not terrorism." those words smacked me across my eye screen and brought my thoughts to attention. For this story, which is really more of an editorial than story, the writer discusses how the social media technology has changed the face of this information warfare, broadening and widening its expanse and its reach. This is content dense so I am not going to go through line by line, but this is a must read if you want to learn more about what's taking place and some suggestions for the best military to get involved in the fight. I thought this story lightly touched on the quotation prompt in that in discussing various situations where such mettle is shown, this met the basics for use of the quotation prompt and it works for this content.


What I liked most: This editorial is content dense and though I need more time to absorb all that I read, I like that you provided this for the entry. It shows your dedication and thought process in story writing.

What I liked least: I did not have anything that I disliked about this story.

Your spelling and grammar: Happily, I can say that I did not find any spelling or grammar errors in this writing.


Closing thoughts: Some writings work when they hit you with as much content as this story chose to do, and some others do not. Fortunately for you, this worked as a editorial piece filled with interesting supported content for the reader to peruse. Your writing was so informational...thank you for this content.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.
Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Singularity  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi šŸŒ• HuntersMoon


I am reviewing your entry, "Singularity", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: The sci-fi feel is felt as I tread through the words on the page and then my thoughts are opened to the lyrical mood as the story continues with the characters of Tamor and Davi, two humans in the far off distant future where the machines took over the Earth, and relegated the humans back to the stone age. The story moves along in a well paced manner and is interesting with new words like singularity used both as the title and within the text for further teaching moments. Man is basically scampering and scraping along to survive and it nearly seems all manner of writings have been destroyed, that is, until, Davi finds an important clue to the humans "regrowing their teeth." That would be a sad state of affairs if all the humans no longer grew their teeth? All food is gummed, regardless of age? A most frightening place to be and live, so it was an important find for all of mankind!


What I liked most: I liked the mood and movement of the story and the post apocalyptic feel to it, especially one I'd not read before where man no longer has teeth or can grow them. Yes, this was a most interesting angle to add to this story.

What I liked least: There was nothing that I disliked about this story.

Your spelling and grammar: There were no spelling or grammar issues in this story

Closing thoughts: Most post apocalyptic stories never use this angle of the singularity causing the end of life as we know it but it felt like a fresh twist that was refreshing and fun to read.

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Review of Rosary peas  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Latha K Chirayil


I am reviewing your entry, "Rosary Peas", as a judge for
 
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My overall opinion: What a gem of a story we have in this little tale called "Rosary Peas", which for those who scratched their heads at the name, it's a poisonous flowering bean plant that grows in tropical locations. Now, that we got the housekeeping out of the way, we can talk about the story. It's the story of a boy who grows into a man really following and learning from his grandfather's instruction more than his parents, specifically his father. It lightly touches on the quotation prompt but it's influence is still felt throughout the story. I felt involved in the story and wanted to know more after it ended. Very good job getting the reader invested!

What I liked most: I liked the dynamics between the grandson and his grandfather. It felt like a powerful magnet that helped to drive the momentum of the story.

What I liked least: I really did not find anything that I disliked about the story and so cannot say that I disliked anything.

Your spelling and grammar: I did not find any misspelled words or punctuation errors.


Closing thoughts: What a thoughtful and pleasant story involving a poisonous plant that wasn't part of the story in a negative way but used more to show a lesson that you can take away after reading. Very interesting and I enjoy learning something new from my readings, and I did just that today!

I enjoyed reading and reviewing your work today. Take or leave what you wish. Keep writing.

Thanks for your entry and best wishes in the contest.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mary Ann MCPhedran

This review is for your mysteriously intriguing poem titled, "Come with Me Beneath the Sea" which speaks of wondrous sights all held within the ocean depths. It feels like a beautiful poetry for readers of all ages even though the young might not follow the mystery of the title.

Impression: The language used is lovely and lyrical even with spatial and colors given to fill the mind with delight in musing on this idea. It is an enjoyable and though quite flowing, it does not take up much space to say so much.

*Heart* What I loved: I loved the movement and fluidity of this poetry. You know you're reading a good writing when you find yourself not wanting to stop, and that's how I felt about this piece.


*Leafr* What needs work: I found nothing that needed work.


*Note1*Final thoughts: What a fantastically lovely writing that talks about traveling beneath the sea to enjoy the wonders beneath! Wow, sounds like a trip I'd love to be a part of.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi LadyLeo

This review is for your beautiful piece titled, "Raindrops and Bliss", a sweet serenade to a lovely rainy day. It is a sweetly written poem that captures the essence and movement of this rainy day. A lot of love went into this writing and it shows.

Impression: When I read this poem, I was immediately drawn into this peaceful place with the feel of the opening lines, and the nearly visual cues given within. It has great rhythm and you can almost find yourself there with the author as you read this poem. Lovely work!

*Heart* What I loved: I thought this poem was blissful and full of life, even through the rain, this was felt throughout this piece. There wasn't a part that I did not enjoy and that made me happy.


*Leafr* What needs work: Nothing in this writing needs work.


*Note1*Final thoughts: I love reading well written poetry and this writing was just a pleasure to read and review! Thank you for this opportunity to share in your time, on the porch, watching the rain fall.

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