The imagery was vivid and lovely, drawing the reader into the scene. I really connected to idea the reminiscent daydreams inspired by the sea. It was easy to follow and the flow of it stopped at thoughtful pauses that added to the sense of reverie. Overall, it was very well done.
I liked the honesty of it, it was genuine and true. so many people will be able to relate to what your saying and feel connected. I would work on the flow of it though. I found it slightly hard to follow. it struck me as a stream of consciousness piece, which are always interesting and insightful. I would look at drawing together related ideas and treating it like an essay, rather than a poem. As a poem it has promise and genuine feeling.
I liked the twist at the end, i did not see that coming. The theme of bullying is so big right now, its relavence draws the reader in. Its just the right length and its told in a clean, clear way that keeps the readers attention. I thought it was well done and enjoyable. I won't send gift points upon requested but it deserves some
That was great. The way the communication networks are going, I can see that kind of conversation being the norm in the future. Frighteningly, it mostly is now. It was a good length, easy to follow and believably written. Its a good piece of work. Keep it up.
The ideas and images conveyed are well illustrated and I know the feeling, personally, that the piece invokes. I gather the decision to leave out punctuation was deliberate, but I found it hard to follow without it. Over all, I enjoyed it.
That was really fun to read and I think I'll use some of those fun stumpers on my kids later, my husband even. I taught the kids to read with green eggs and ham, and one fish - two fish.
I like the concept and idea, and the points were made very clearly. however, I found it a little hard to follow, maybe rework some of wording to enhance flow. It has a great deal of potential and I can see that you put a lot of work into it. Creating this style of poem is a challenge, and that's all part of the fun. Over all, id say it is well done.
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