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Review by nemo
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
hey mark

i feel ur pain buddy!
but my honest opinion would be to make it flow smoothly with sum good rhyming
otherwise it reads like a letter or an email
just put sum more thought in to making the words flow freely, leading the reader from one sentence to the next
cheers!
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