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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You might want to change the number of periods you have in these places- '"Why did you do that......damn it! You had so much waiting for you back home! You were going to be engaged to Kyrie.....she adores you......not me, you! Why did you throw that away for me?"'
'"He was right......" Zeke whispered, "I am useless. All I did was....just'

You're only suppose to have three periods when doing that. Have a good day/night. Otherwise, it's good and I like it.
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