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Review of A Dark Dream  
Review by NikolaiLuther
Rated: E | (3.5)
Dark Poetry...I love it. I always like to see poems about death and blood rather than romance and relationships lol. Anyway I think you have a good start but I would like to see more. Make it a little longer, maybe a section on what is chasing you or why it is chasing you.
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Review of Let Go  
Review by NikolaiLuther
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Now, normally I don't read these kinds of passages but first I'd like to say that it overall excellent. I really enjoyed it. You really have a good tone and style. Your descriptive work was great. I could picture the scenes clear in my mind. I have only one real suggestion and that is you should combine certain sentences like for ex.

"Suddenly she felt old. A heavy weight tied her down. She wished she'd never met him."
This is what I suggest " Suddenly she felt old, a heavy weight tied her down exasperating her wish that she'd never met him."

You may not want to take my suggestion but I hope it helps. Keep writing!
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Review by NikolaiLuther
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed it but I have one suggestion: With the opening paragraph I think you should go into detail exactly where they are to give it a little more atmosphere. Otherwise i thought it was pretty good. Keep writing!
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Review by NikolaiLuther
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Wow lol, I have to say this made me laugh. I really like the way Harry and Dudley were switched. "I'll try to suck in my stomach if I can go" that was great. Your writing style is pretty good, only suggestion I could make is to keep going with this. Can't wait to read the other parts.
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