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Review by Norky
Rated: E | (3.0)
Here are some of the things that could be fixed.Deer can be singular or plural so it doesn't make sense to put the younger deer's.And wouldn't it be better to put impossible to hear instead of ear.I also don't understand why you put where your getting yourself into.Wouldn't it be better to put what your getting yourself into.I also don't understand the phrase otherwise I would I be here. These are just some of the things that I found.I really enjoyed the story.Please think of these corrections as trying to help you.I would appreciate someone doing the same for me.
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Review by Norky
Rated: E | (3.5)
I think this is an amazing piece Thank You for posting it.I would enjoy reading more like it.
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