Is this an intro? It could be an interesting story I like the fact it seems to be set in modern times and in a major city. the only criticism I would offer is to draw that fact forward more, like is it cold, what about the sounds and smells of a major city, these thing would help where and when this takes place.
when you read witch people automatically put them in some distance never never land.
the prose was beautiful. A lot of the scenes were vivid to read, however the description started to over run the story making it feel a lot longer and more labor intensive to get through. almost like there was a word count you wanted to hit instead of a story you wanted to get out.
It was well put together it didn't jump in the narrative.
but my one problem with it was it didn't really make me want to read on.
It starts as most stories in this genre I kind feel I've read this before.
I feel like the author had a true idea what his village was and were everything was going to be in it but that doesn't make feel real
I was prepared not to like this story, I ran through it quickly before reading it and thought I was going to hate it but I was wrong.That was interesting in a good way, I think I'm going to read that again. the voices used were rich and distinct. I love the interview slant in this story.
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