Overall Impression:
A moving piece about a distant child and a lonely parent, albeit trusting the will and values instilled in said child, which is nearly perfect.
Favorite Part:
"I give you character and integrity,
So you will respect the less fortunate you see in me."
I enjoy this line because is shows a weakness that you know you weren't perfect and it tells me you speak of compassion.
Suggestions:
I would only ask for more information about the relationship as it stands now and why.
Grammar & Errors:
None
Other Remarks:
Moving on to the rest of your port. I'm curious to know if you have more than these three works?
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