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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hey,

I haven't read the story yet, thought i'll start with this first. Overall it sounds good but i found one problem.

My problem was in the sentence: "But a seemingly worthless A.I. relic holds a secret". I really think that it should read: "But the seemingly worthless A.I relic holds a secret." Connected to the sentence before, it sounds better this way.

I hope this was in any way helpful. I will start reading the chapters as well, sounds interesting =)

-Omri
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