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Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: 18+ | (2.5)
"but first you would have to get us all to agree that we are mentally ill"...isn't that true for humanity, as a race? Seriously, step back, and look, as aan outsider. As a mass society, we suffer delusional schizophrenic symptoms CONSTANTLY.

As for your assertions, it's been conclusively proved there is a genetic link to the chemical-imbalance illnesses (clinical depression, bi-polar disorder, schizophrenia), but so far as my reading has said, BPD and schizoid disorders are maternally linked, not paternally. It is possible that some of the familial behavior is "environmentally conditioned behavior", and not chemical in nature, born of being raised in a household with untreated chemical-imbalance based mental illnesses being the norm. After all, if such behaviors were learned by observation as "normal" and "proper", the patient wouldn't know it, and the observing doctor wouldn't be able to discern between a behavioral issue and a chemical one, and would prescribe typically effective medications, rather than more effective (for the circumstances) therapy.

Then again, when you pass a certain point of emotional stress and trauma, that can induce certain illnesses.

At any rate, the essay was interesting, and the last line a kicker of a grin :)
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Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well said! A bit "self-help-book", but still well said!
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Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: E | (4.5)
Excellent start. Let's see where you go with it.
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Review of PTSD  
Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I have to ask....is this written by a vet/sufferer still struggling to present it from the inside, or from an outsider trying their best to express what they understand of PTSD to others, for reasons of empathy?

As a vet and patient, member of a VA group therapy group, son-in-law of a fellow sufferer, who talks at length with me about it, most of this representation is not quite on. But it's trying SO hard, it hurts.
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Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A bit cliche, but a well done presentation of that cliche.

I would love to see this expanded into a new work, now that the contest piece has been done. It only paints the driest picture of what happened to Echid, and almost none as to what circumstances Katherine died under, both of which entice me, greatly.

Quite easily, this could be turned into a story that would completely obscure the "normal society members were more monstrous and evil than the monster" cliche with the personality of the tale itself.
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Review of Envy  
Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very evocative, and this draws vivid images, almost mental movies, in the mind of the reader. There are structural weaknesses in the layout and tempo, but they are minor flaws, in the eyes of what you are placing in the mind, not enough to jar a reader from their internal visualizing. The closing is a bit...immature, though, I think a couple more verses describing HER envy of THEM, which is probably a big part of why she puts herself through such discomfort, for a display peacock fashion show that causes such physical misery.
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Review of My Dearest Son  
Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Killer. That's all I can say.
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Review of THE ANGRY PATIENT  
Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: E | (1.0)
I hope you intend to expand on this. As is, it's simply a rather unpleasant peek into day to day life in a particular field. It leaves me feeling there should be a deeper story, either continued, or backgrounded.
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Review of the nightmare  
Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: E | (1.5)
There is no resolution, here. As short as it is, it should still make some effort to allow the reader to surmise who the subjects of the dream are, and why the mother reacts as she does. As is, it simply lays out the confused, unfinished feeling of having a buildup, but no climax.

Nice attempt, expand on it a bit, and see what happens.

If you take this advice, mail me, so I can check it out, I think it has promise. Could end up being quite the gut-twisting shocker type "scary story".
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Review of Amending city law  
Review by C Scott Gray
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
The issue with this is that all such issues affect more than the one person applying for the exemption. They live in a society, no matter how close or loose-knit, and those laws and ordinances are enacted either by the preference of, or for the (perceived) safety of the whole. In either case, if the majority supports, why should the individual have "superior rights"?

The major issue here quickly becomes "equality of rights"...there are procedures in place for creating legal amendments, or "doing away with" laws and ordinances, and, if we are to remain a society of "every man (and woman) is equal to every other, under eyes of law", then exemptions can't be allowed, only amendments or repeals that apply to ANYONE, even if circumstances are narrowed to the point that they effectively affect only this one person. In other words, the amendment can say "unless a citizen applies at city hall for a license to house "exotic pets", defined as X, X, X, or X, and is granted such license after review by [body to review application]" and blah blah blah, making it so anyone who wishes to can own such an animal, or at least apply to.


If you fail to approach it in this manner, what you are, in essences, doing, is placing an Orwellian "all animals are created equal, only some are more equal than others." situation. Exempting one person, or class of people, based on any particular criteria beyond their own efforts, is anathema to what this country stands for. Try putting your proposal into another light...assume your person seeking an exception is Caucasian, and his attempt at exemption is placed like this "Caucasians may own such animals, while others are still bound by city ordinance". Do you like that? Well, that's what you are, in essence, doing, if you allow HIM a special exemption. You are creating a "special class" based on whatever factors, and shutting out all outside that class, thus granting "special rights" to one class of citizen.
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