Well, my very first review. I can tell you that I'm not used to grading someones grammer or anything like that so I'm going to concentrate on the plot. It was interesting, even though the beginning kind of jumped to the part with the main character getting the house, I guess most can say that's a good thing to tell the story already. Your decription with the find of the pictures with the dead woman seemed to have the main charachter drawn to them to continue looking instead of stopping, the same effect was made to the reader, where I was compelled and intrigued but yet disgusted to continue reading. One thing that felt kind of off in this horror story is the vacuum. If you think about it, it sounds kind of stupid that a vacuum would go on killing people, altough the descriptions of the deaths were amazing. I liked the analogy you made with the pictures of necrophilia and the vacuum killing the female. Overall it was really nice work, altough it could have been longer, it's still a fine piece of work.
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