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Review of Connect the dots  
Review by paperorigami
Rated: E | (3.0)
The summary really got me interested, although it kind of made the story a tad predictable. There were a few grammatical errors in the piece; a few too many commas but the overall story was good. I liked the descriptions of the freckles- 'stars, constellations,' and the ending was well thought out. I thought it might have been nice to get an insight into her secret tattoos- because her mother didn't know, how did she feel about them- were they different to her first tattoos or just special because they could never be taken away?
All in all, a nice read. Keep writing!
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