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Review by PBJPhil
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I really enjoyed your story. I love stories that evoke great visuals and your story did that. The only thing I would change would be elaborating more on the dream and use more detail to pull the dream and the reality together. More detail would help to clarify the paralells. Thanks for sharing!
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Review of The Lost decade  
Review by PBJPhil
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
That's it? I want more! How does she get it together, how does she grow?

This was very well written and I felt drawn into it. I also felt uncerimoniously dumped out with the sudden and unresolving ending.

Keep writing and don't be afraid to expand. You obviously know how to weave a tale!
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