You rose and successfully met the challenge. You managed to get a lot of character and story using only dialogue. The children were engaging and believable. The squabble was amusing. I liked how Miss Octavia got control of the situation, even though Ludia was disrespectful. I enjoyed this short story.
A very amusing scene. An entertaining poem. The imagery creates a rich, humorous picture of some of the world's most powerful leaders equally "assaulted" by the contents of the exploded coffee maker. I am glad that it did not succeed in ruining the peace talks. I really enjoyed reading this.
You rose and met the challenge. This poem captures the quote very well. The story of the heart ruling when it is not in its best interest. Your pain and regret saturates every word. The cross purposes of brain and heart is also illustrated with the line of "joyride to doomsday." I enjoyed reading this poem.
An honest,soul-searching poem. Sometimes letting go is the hardest thing to do. It is painful to let a love go, even for their own happiness. Your sense of loss shows through in every line. I hope you have found your place to "bask in sweet sunshine once more." I enjoyed reading this.
An interesting poem on the daily struggle of a loner that has to work with people, even in a small office setting. The imagery shows the immense use of willpower to go to to a job you have no interest in or love for. The flow pulls the reader through the entire poem easily. I enjoyed reading this poem.
I will start by saying, I am very sorry for what you survived. This poem was very intense, giving voice to that injured child and every other child who has gone through a similar experience. Your pain is released in every word. I hope it was cathartic and that you are in a better place now. This was well written and gives an important message. Thank you for sharing.
A very intense poem. He is not forgotten, as long as he remains in your heart and on the page. The imagery of this poor little dog brought a tear to my eye. The flow was easy, like a stroll, showing your love for this dog. I really enjoyed reading it.
A very fun poem. The flow easily carried me along the entire piece. It imagery seemed almost chaotic and disjointed, BUT, it was a cohesive whole. It illustrates the power of words. The dramatic feel to the poem was enjoyable. I liked reading this poem.
You rose to the challenge. A very nice story about a spiderdragon. Your description of him truly shows us Drenforkna. I also liked how you turned it into a cautionary tale that parents use to frighten children into behaving. Ending it with the hint that maybe the spider you see is not a spider at all. I enjoyed it.
A very moving poem. The emotion revealed through the piece is so powerful and raw. Your love, admiration and compassion for both the father and the hero are evident in every word. I like how you show that even though he is damaged and no longer the man he was, he is still a hero to you. Thank you for sharing such a personal story.
A very well written and concise article. It is very informative and helpful. You managed to get a lot of information in a very short article. You did succeed in making the exercise of writing and action scene "Very Simple." I really enjoyed this article.
A poem that relays a very relatable story. We all have ghosts of loves past that haunt and torment the soul. The imagery illustrates the pain and desire to vanquish the ghost.I hope you have finally freed yourself from her ghost. I really enjoyed this poem.
A very dramatic poem. The lesson that we should listen when our pets talk to us is very well taught. It reads more like a story, which gives it a nice flow. The imagery of the dog trying to warn and the frustration of trying to get him to go for the walk paints a very rich picture. I enjoyed reading this poem.
I have never heard of a puzzle piece poem, but I found it very entertaining. The jaunty flow swept me right along. The seeming randomness of the imagery was amusing illustrated the chaos that life can be sometimes. I really enjoyed reading this poem.
An interesting poem. I am curious how the mirror betrayed the queen? Telling the "story" from the viewpoint of the mirror was a unique spin. The imagery shows the loneliness and sadness that can feed greed. The reader can empathize with the queen. I enjoyed the poem.
An interesting story discussing the struggle with depression. I am glad it appears that Sunshine followed her own advice to Stone and talked about her emotions. It is important to acknowledge that everyone gets sad from time to time, and having them talk about it like they did handles that in a gentle and respectful manner. I enjoyed this story.
A very dramatic poem. The imagery illustrates the ideal love in a fairy tale. The flow easily picks me up and carrie3s me through the poem. It discusses the emotional dangers of holding love to the fairy tale standard. It gently gets the message across. I enjoyed reading this poem.
An intriguing short story. Having her enter the snow globe in the end was a surprising twist. S ad ending, turning into the beginning of a new tale. The character was compelling and believable. A very unique Christmas story. I really enjoyed reading this.
An intriguing poem. The repetitive use of the phrase, "The window pane," brings the poem together as a single solid piece. The imagery is beautifully sad. I like how you do not reveal what you are watching through the window pane, allowing the reader to watch their own thing. I enjoyed reading this poem.
A very humorous poem. Their relationship seems almost toxic, if it were not a humorous spin on wedding stress. The imagery of the note, being soiled and shoved back under the door was as disgusting as it was funny. The flow jauntily carried me through the poem. I enjoyed reading this poem.
I can easily see why it was awarded first place. It is a horror story with a touch of humor to it. If the building is a pound, that is apt justice. You almost feel sorry for the cat in the end, almost. I liked how you got into the cat's head and told the story from his point of view. I enjoyed reading this short story.
A good start to a story. You might consider using you instead of u, since it is not a text, or tweet. Winter is an engaging character. The dialogue when Winter is asking her mother for breakfast could be made more natural. I like how you have Sam the opposite personality as Winter. There was a typo,"Sam was a boy who was as quiet and polite as her sister," it should be his sister. The fire brings some good drama to the story. "undetectable," might work better as unknown or not known (or something similar). It is a chapter that makes the reader want to read more story. What being did she fall over? You mentioned that she fell over another being, but it is not mentioned further. I enjoyed reading this chapter.
This poem is a very touching tribute to not only the show, but the characters. I like how you end it with a personal and touching tribute to Leonard Nimoy in the end. The flow easily carried me through the entire poem with its jaunty rhythm. I enjoy Star Trek too, and this poem shows other Trekies, no matter how little that they are not alone in their fondness of the show. Good job.
A very touching holiday poem. Having it from the perspective of the Christmas tree allows the reader to step back and see the special feelings around the holidays. Such a loving and happy tree. Sad that the tree knows that it will die soon. I liked how you made the poem look like a Christmas tree. I enjoyed this poem.
A conversation that I feel many people have had with God and/or with themselves countless times. Giving over that power takes away free will, BUT, it also frees the spirit by removing doubt. This conversation shows faith in pure form. Very simply put, but very insightful. I enjoyed the piece.
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