THAT WAS A WRITER'S BLOCK? That was wonderful! That was beautiful! My only recommendation is that you use some more adjectives - that's it, but believe me it'll really help you improve your writing. I found it really really heartwarming, with the flap of the wings to the first flight, I love the way this poem is written! nice job!
I only recommend that you check over punctuation more carefully - I only noticed 1 error but this is a very useful tip for authors. Keep up the great work! (By the way, there's ALWAYS a reason to try - just remember that.) :)
P.S. I'm new to writing.com - if you could visit my profile and give me some constructed criticism, I'd really appreciate it!
So far this is the BEST WRITING I've seen! Nice work! I'll return to your portfolio to read more; it'll help the both of us! I feel you really drew the picture of what life is all about - the power of creativity and wonder! It's VERY unique! I do encourage you to write more and think more about this concept; it's definitely interesting!
I enjoyed the entire idea of the poem; the whole concept of two worlds meeting is SO inspirational! However, I do encourage you to be more descriptive; try using some more adjectives and verbs; it'll really help make the poem more memorable! But I LOVE THIS CONCEPT! One more little thing; keep writing poetry; you're really good at it!
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