Nice new twist on an aged old story! The name Gandolph didn't ring true though. Reginald did however. Also, I was expecting Gandolph to be wearing a hat. I would have liked to hear more about his appearance. I know its a cliché but I it should have been foggy outside when Reginald opened the door. Perhaps just a little more introspective dialogue would be adding more emotion and stretch out your passage of time. Still, it was an entertaining little story!
Your obvious inspiration comes from love of the heart. As a Vietnam vet and having both father and grandfather fought in WWII the importance of pieces like this cannot be overstated. He'd be proud.
I love the simple rhyming scheme. As the reader I anticipating each rhyme and was not let down. The syllable cadence worked beautifully. In all, these piece has no nothing lacking.
Nicely done!
Pg
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