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Review of The Struggle  
Review by Pogacsas
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is very cleverly written. Making it sound like an actual fight rather than a chase game is a wonderful idea. In a short space you condense a lot information. The last sentence, however, seemed a little weak. It seemed just to be floating there. Try and find a better way of putting in the idea that it is a chess game.
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