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My Rating: 3

Impression of Title: When I saw the title and then that it was labeled as "Children's," it put me off a little, because I could not comprehend how the two fit with each other.

Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation: This is far better than I see a lot of the times, though you do have a few mistakes:
Cheating has other consequences too." There should be a comma after consequences.
"Moreover, ... everything to make lives easy." Lives should be life OR make it, "to make their lives easy."
"They cheat on their friends, their parents, relationships, and even the society at times." The flow of this is messed up, I believe because of the on and then the society. If you took out the rest of the sentence, you would not say, "They cheat on society," it would must likely be, "They cheat society."
"Because though in today’s fast-paced world getting away with your darkest deeds seems the coolest thing, honesty is still the best policy for the overall happiness in life." I don't see a point to the though.

My thoughts: You have a very good point and do a fine job of explaining.

Flow/Rhythm: This is a little off-putting; I would say if you fix the the above issues that I pointed out, you'd be fine.

Suggestions:
"Often when I am taking exams, I find people taking out notes secretly and jotting down answers." I think you need to revise this. I had to read it twice. I'm not quite sure why a student would be jotting down answers during the test, wouldn't he/she already have them?
Also, I think you might want to down the font and color a bit, for such a serious essay it seems a little far out.
One more thing...can I ask why you labeled this Children's? It does not have a readability based towards children, nor really a topic. I think a better label would be Young Adult or Educational.

Overall: Again, very good point and good way of expressing it.

Love, Life, and Covens

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General Disclaimer: My review is only my opinion, and is only meant to be helpful to you.

My Rating: 4 stars just for content.

Impression of Title: Good, but should be capitalized and without the period.

Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation: Good, I saw no mistakes.

My thoughts: Sad. Very, very sad. I liked the ending though, it was a nice closing.

Flow/Rhythm: You really didn't have any, but I don't think you need one.

Suggestions: None, you did fine on your own.

Overall: Thought provoking and heartbreaking.

Love, Life, and Covens