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Review of Home Front  
Review by Quaden
Rated: E | (4.0)
Great story, I was not going to review this but once I started reading you got me hooked. One thing I would change is make it clear at the beginning of the fight between the father and the Mother. Start with the dish braking the the "flash back" later in the story will make more sense. You don't want to confuse your readers with unwanted details. (unless it is a mystery story). Otherwise, it is a great start, do a little editing and it will be strong. Hope this helps



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