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Review of The Food Chain  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed reading this, short but to the point with a happy ending. You finished this very nicely and I think you could possibly make this in to a full novel, it's a great idea. In just a few paragraphs you managed to give your characters there own personalities, hard to do with such short stories. I also liked your style of writing and you pulled me into the story within the first couple of paragraphs.
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for entry "Chapter 2" 
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
I really liked this, the concept is very interesting. I found the first 2 paragraphs hard to read and get into, I nearly stopped reading but decided to carry on. I'm glad I did, after a hesitant start the story seemed to unfold and I could almost hear the main character in my head. Very well written especially the more you got into the story. As I said, I love the idea and have never read anything like this before.
There were a couple of grammatical errors, but I don't think they affected your story, but worth re-reading and correcting.
I thouroughly enjoyed reading this and will look out for any additions.

Rachel
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I liked this alot, whilst I was reading this I spent the whole time wondering what the hell they'd landed on and what hole with water? I found this slightly amusing and thouroughly entertaining.

This was a great short read and I enjoyed it very much.

The only thing I thought didn't quite fit was referring to the aliens as it, just seemed odd and out of place.
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