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Review of Unexpected Snack  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I liked this piece alot. I thought the dialogue was free and easy to follow. the subject matter was interesting. what i would say is that if i were you i would lay this iece out like a play. i would give the characters names, age and a short description. i would set the scene and give stage directions. maybe you could even expand on this and create a one act play, incorporating the scene where he killed his wife and friend and then maybe a scene from the trial and prison. The dialogue is all there it just needs arranging. i have given you a high rating I hope that this has been useful.

carry on writing*Smile*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
i found that this poem flowed beautifully with lines such as "a banquet of clarity, that pacifies the soul" going nicely together.

My favourite verse was th last one "percolate an image intensely warped in its own reflective urgency, as life begins again."

Overall I enjoyed reading this poem, i have given it five stars.

I'm sorry i cannot be more constructive in my review and i hope that this reaches you in good faith.

carry on writing.
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