Wow. You have a very unique way of wording things. It's powerful and very potent. Immediately I felt the the plight of your character and recognized her hardship. It pulled me into her world and also into yours, as you put a little bit of yourself into it.
What I like about this is that every stanza serves a purpose and builds on the story... sometimes poets have a tendency to lean towards superfluity, but you did not. Every line was strong because every line had meaning.
This story caught my attention from the first sentence. I love it. How interesting and unique. So many stories these days seem to be about the same general theme; however, yours breaks the mold and is something singular to itself. I hope you continue to write. You have a knack for it.
The only way I can describe this poem is: fun. I loved it! Each stanza was creative, inventive, and despite the hardship, very upbeat for what it was. I love the lessons learned at the end. It wraps the poem up quite nicely. Glad I pressed the "random read" button. Look forward to reading more from you!
I can see why this poem was awarded a ribbon. This poem is EXTREMELY well done. I love your diction and your commitment to your stanzas; each one of them flows together seamlessly with the next. I am glad you stumbled upon my work because it gave me the opportunity to stumble upon yours as well. Very nicely done. You are a poet at heart!
Interesting read, indeed! I liked this story. It kind of reminded me of tell-tale heart, only without the murder and guilty conscious and all that, ha ha. I enjoyed this a lot. The character's plight as he continued to discern the origin of the sound...the way it is described makes me feel like I'm right there searching for the sound with him. Great job!
Very interesting start! I like the mystery behind this piece. It's gripping and pulls the reader in right away. I'm interested in this protector and what in the world is going to upset the peace? This piece is short, but its also potent. I look forward to what comes next.
Very interesting read. The imagery was good without being overwhelming and the characters were relatable and honest. The dialogue did not seem forced and the story itself flowed very well. I like what you've done with this. The story itself felt unique and not like every other thing I've read lately. Excellent job.
This is an honest story and a good read. I like it a lot. The characters are fun and easily likeable. The choppiness did make it a little hard to follow, though. Aside from that, you have a great story on your hands. Very nice bones and very nice story structure so far. Look forward to reading more from group
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