A sad poem, its gives great encouragement and allows you to think. I really enjoyed the message, although at first it was hard to read because of the structure, but I enjoyed it :)
I'm only a newbie on here. I liked your story, it has potential. The only problem I had was that I expected more suspense and wanted to feel chills, but I didn't get that sort of passion here. Nonetheless, It was a good story. Keep Writing!
Fellow newbie here, I liked the summary so I decided to read. I enjoyed this story. However, I was not really convinced that It was another world. I wanted suspense and more exciting details. I do not know a lot nor am I experienced, but I felt that a story of this kind should keep you off your seat. Overall It was a good story with potential so keep writing!
Wow very good piece. I really like how this flows especially with the rhyming pattern.The last two lines that were repeated wrapped everything thing up quite nicely. What mostly impressed me was that you spoke of a theme that is so popular, yet I enjoyed it because I could feel the the emotions and the sincerity. Great Job
This was a very beautiful story. I got the idea that it is personal, but It is so real without being monotonous that It could be fiction and still .
believable. This was able to evoke the appropriate emotions
I'm a newbie myself, but In my opinion you could have used more descriptions to make it more exciting at the beginning or even the part about the police who was beaten and more details about the Juvenile Jail
This was a beautiful read, very graceful and I really loved the flow.
The only problem I had as that all the words we clustered, so I sometimes got lost while reading and I had to go over a part again,
but overall I really liked the Imagery you created and the pain that this person felt was expressed well so it could evoke sympathy in the readers. Keep Writing!
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