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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Ibteresting concept telling a story in reverse. In preparing this review I actually read your poem forward, and backward. I found it pretty much as good in both directions which I found a pleasant surprise.

I would have liked to see more than two lines per stanza. I personally use four myself. Although I'm not sure how this would have worked with the self question/ self answer narrative that you use so effectively.

I also would have written the final line as,

"As if You're walking out of work." I just feel like it makes a stronger sentance, but maybe thats just me.
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