It was a very good poem cum story. A little difficult to understand it first but by the time I finished it I got an idea of what it was about. It was a good attempt of showing about how sin is increasing in everyday life.
Overall, I like it. Keep up the good work!
Hey, this one is a great short poem. It was very sensual and good. I like how you said so much in a few sentences. The only thing is that I'm not too sure if 'Time's come'suits well. Maybe you could use some other phrasing there. That's up to you. Other than that, it was really nice. Keep up the good work!
The poem was very well-written. Somehow, it feels like a rant to me. But, still, it was great with no errors. The rhyming, structure, and pacing was great. It had a great chorus and it sounds almost musical.
Wow! This was a great poem. It was a simple and sweet poem that encourages the Christmas spirit. It was nice. I like the way it flowed and it tells so much with a hint of simplicity in its sleeve. The rhythm was good and the words matched perfectly with each other.
This was a good poem! I like how you described the effects of winter. That was really nice. The pacing was good though I'm not too sure about the 'Maniacal' gaze you could use something else or it's a different word. Overall, I enjoyed this little poem. Keep Writing!
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