What a cute little story. Leads me to wonder the before and the after of the story. Those are the signs I look for; what tells me the writing is good. It keeps me wondering.
There was a word or two left out; and a spelling error. (rocked instead of rock) I get excited at my own writings sometimes and write in my head faster than I actually type. A reminder to myself to always read through the story before final submission. Good Job!
What a sweet story of sisters sharing and caring. Reminds me of my sister and how close we were growing up and even closer now as adults. I enjoyed the story. It provided good descriptions of the dress, the small accessories collected over time to complete the costume and the music box. I may have chosen a more child-favorite cereal than Honey Nut Cheerios and I may have thrown in a comma or two if not a new sentence in some areas. Overall I like the story very well.
This little ditty definitely meets the contest guidelines. It reminded me of the shenanigans that others were involved in when I was twelve. Of course, I would never have participated in such. The name, Mr. Cobb, makes me think his class would be difficult. He probably takes a lot of kidding and dishes out lots of homework assignments. And, for a twelve year old, the baseball diamond looks much better than doing homework. Good Job!
A fascination with death or with Death? An interesting short story of how even the devil's own dislikes his being and his final resting place. It doesn't seem to matter who the next assignment is just as long as there is a next assignment. The object being not to bring souls in but to pass responsibility on. Again, the devil even hates the lifestyle he has chosen. The story made the contest criteria perfectly and should be a winner for sure. Cute ending with swapping of the scythe. Some fools never learn.
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