GREAT UNIFORMITY AND CONSISTENCY ALL THROUGH THE POEM WITH THE RHYTHMIC FLOW.
GOOD JOB WELL DONE WITH THE POEM.
WONDERFUL CONTINUITY AND CONNECTIVITY OF ONE POEM TO THE OTHER.
PERFECT STARTING AND ENDING.
NICE LEXIS AND STRUCTURE AND AGREEMENT OF SUBJECT AND VERB.
NICE WORK WELL DONE
Line 9 should rather be
'I HAVE GROWN ACCUSTOMED'-Error of tenses.
Nice progression,a piece you would want to look forward to the next line.
Grammar in place as well as agreement of subject to verb.
The poem did however a very perfect ending.Good job well done
'My car clearing the fast and slow traffic' and 'with respect and honesty' should each be on separate lines.But short and nice poem. What a very good way to deliver such message to all drivers. But nice and good job well done.Punctuation,grammar and subject agreement with verb very okay.
Very good poem.Easy to interprete. From my own point of view, I just the verses were not well arranged.I would suggest you consider the verse in the following order verse 2,1,3,4,5,6,8 and 7.
I did not feel the progression was perfect as the verses from my point of view were not well arranged however good job well done.
Interesting,precise and fun to read. A million interpretation can be given to this poem.Nice collection of rhymes and the picture really befits this beautiful poem.You really did a good job and the writing of the poem in 'pink' was not a bad choice.Thumbs up.
Very good,such encouraging poem. Good characterisation of virtues that preach faith and hope.Vocabulary very cool, agreement of subject and verb perfect. Great progression of poem with a perfect ending. Could have been better though but good job well done.
A good poem. Very good job done with the rhymes. Good portray of story.Well structured sentences. Agreement of subject and verb very much in place. Poem could be better though the rhymes got me reading even on my toes. Vocabulary and characterisation in place.
Good,short and precised straight to the point trio-versed poem.Nice portray and progression of poem from death to the lowering into the ground.Good agreement of subject and verb.It could be better though I got lost in some part due to wrong punctuation.
No, the poem didn't make me groan.You did a good job with the homonyms.It's a rare effort by poets.They were not just mere homonyms but each homonym used all fell in place with the poem.I must really commend you that you really did a good job.The poem is a challenge to poets.
"as a nation for immigrants, people who "
review:There should be a full stop between immigrants and people;both sentences are independent of each other though the latter is a supplement of the first.
"but I also found how big dedication Japan do to the US"
Review:The sentence should rather be, 'But I also found how big Japan's dedication is to the US
"add thousands, perhaps millions jobs on...."
Review:The sentence should be "add thousands, perhaps million jobs to......"
'Who is good at keeping New Year's resolutions? Anybody? Anyone? I didn't think so'.
Review: subject agreement with verb so it should be I don't think so
'When it comes to New Year's resolutions I think most of those intentions....'
Review:There should be a coma between 'RESOLUTIONS' AND 'I'
WELL DONE.ALL THE BEST WITH YOUR GOALS
Very good work
Grammar in place as well as proper sequence of poem,I mean good progression.The poem started well, continued well and ended on a very good note.
The last line should be"WHY DID YOU DO THE SAME TO ME", IT SHOULD BE 'did' NOT 'do'.Nice job well done.
'You hide, you disguise, you despise
To be seen
With me' ;review: same should be said of the third person too in the conclusive part of the write-up.
Grammar in place.Good narrative poem and a good job well done.
It felt real like I was watching a film as I read each line.The poem was neither underemphasized or overemphasized,it was just perfect for real life scenario.
Each verse was a different stage in the 'characters' life and I liked that about that.
From chapter 1,
paragraph 8
....so blasted busy with .......shindig tonight......'
Review:There should be a 'that' after tonight
paragraph 37
'........everybody is busy but I'm quite sure we have everything we..'
Review:The 2nd 'we' makes the sentence a fragment worth revising
11th to the last paragraph
'I hope you can you can..'
Review:'You can' appears twice,correct please and 9th to the last paragraph
'utter' appears twice too.
Bet the book would be a fun ride for its readers.
Nice similes,good use of onomatopoeia and well vocabularised descriptions.
Character in place and good continuity.
You started this piece of work well.
Wow!!!!!!!!
Each of these 3sentences deserve a verse.So I would expect 3verses;the ideas are there with you just pick your pen and fill your paper with those words.
'th professional at it bleeds off onto him'
Review:'th',incomplete word.I'm guessing it was a typographical error.
Very good introduction as you summwrise the thoughts of the writers of Proverb and nice body,considering the fact that your main target point was just verse 31.
Brief and educative expository on Proverbs 31.
Wonderful piece to start my morning with.
My achievements in life are evidence to this.
Review:Agreement of subject and verb,so it should be;"My achievements in life are evidences to these"
Very inspiring piece;not in anyway portraying self pity but rather courage to move on.
A nice one it is.
10th and 13th sentence,the 'i's should be capitalised
Last sentence should be 'had led' not 'had lead'
Third to the last sentence should be '...his actions were'(grammatical error)
Nice presentation of a breakup
Nice play with colour in your story with a perfect definition of character.
Good transition of romantic tragedy.
Vocabulary well used and grammar well structured.
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