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Review of Firefly  
Review by ScottyS
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is fun and reminds me of summer nights.

I would like to see the rhyme in the last stanza use different words. Maybe something about child at play.
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Review by ScottyS
Rated: E | (3.5)
Great story
You can tell you loved this cat. My only problem is the disconnect between the cat on the woman's lap and her opening the door.
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Review of Two Lovebirds  
Review by ScottyS
Rated: E | (2.0)
This is a nice idea. I have some confusion in regards the ellipsis points at the end of the second and third stanzas. There doesn't seem to be enough information to fill in the missing parts.

I would also like to see more concrete imagery. Instead of countless fertile valleys, maybe you could describe one fertile valley filled with fields and flowers. Instead of copious designs, maybe you could elaborate on some of the designs like sunsets or thunder storms.

I think this would work better if we had some more detail.
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