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Review by Sara
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi!
I think the idea is great,so is the contect; very lively, it takes you to the battlefield as if you are following the soldier in every movement he makes,and you share in his feelings.In respect to form,I think it can be improved,I mean I felt some inconsistencies in rhymes and sometimes words that dident quite fit in (forexample adrenalin in: And with a burst of adrenalin)..of course it's my personal idea and I do not claim to be any expert in poetry;)...Overall, I liked your poem a lot, and I wish you every suceess :)
P.S. I think content is more important than form,what's your idea?
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