I love your words. They have this deep meaning that you have to pay close attention to to fully understand. However, your form in each stanza is not consistent. On some lines, you rhyme and some you don't. I don't know if that was intentional, however, for the poem to have a nicer flow, you might want to take a look at that. Someone once told me that to help myself create good flow, I should read the poem aloud to myself. It will sound differently coming out of your mouth, versus you just reading it in your head silently. The poem still caught my eye though. ;) Good luck with future writing!
-Shelly
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