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Review of 01-Starry Flight  
Rated: E | (4.5)
hey again...
really starting to see a fondness for older-style language here - l like. the way you use it is quite effective, and intriguing.
"into a walkway"
however, l did find that certain lines seemed to revert back to present day lanuage, such as the one above, and this one. "another’s upon contact".
the only other thing l noticed was that there's a small typo in this line - l'm thinking it should be a period, rather than a comma?
"Until a dragon
...as she flew.
Would
...forsake" (where the period is..)
anyway, overall this was very well written, and with extremely beautiful imagery. specially the ending - l think that was my favorite, and sort of hopeful.
~shianna
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