i can so relate to this...i am a woman and i am the opposite of you, but i think men need to learn their place, because we are the moon and you are the water totally in our power once we want you there. now go get a job and bring me some bacon,,,lol i truly did enjoy this poem it was out there and controversial and funny as all hell. let it be known you are welcome to your filth as long as you stay away from mine ;)
i felt a strong connection to my school days with the rain and wet books, and i could understand the way and why she felt drawn to the cemetery, the last part sucked me right in i find myself wanting to know what happened next. it got me excited for this girl who was about to have what seems to me an adventure worth having. I felt it was totally believable and it flowed well. i thought maybe you could expand on the markers, and describe the tombstones or plaques more. but aside from that i really liked it.
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