I really enjoyed the actual story that you have portrayed. My only suggestion is to try and really give the reader and idea, and include as much detail in the moment. For example, insted of jumping into the engagement try giving the reader more, where are they, how many people are around, the weather, is it a beautiful sunny warm day etc.
Wow, I really enjoyed this. Dark but honest and very common (people all having secrets), so it is also relatable. I enjoyed how you turned it dark and a little 'weary' coming to a close. Very good.
I really enjoyed this, it is only once in awhile where we do have moments that allow us to be completely in control, and suffice it to say, most times it is well deserving as in this case. Thank you for the write up, I really enjoyed it.
The part at the end leaving to the bahamas is the 'nail on the head'.
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