This was a very interesting read. As an aspiring author myself, this gave me ambition to improve on my own writing. There isn't much I would say you need to change here. Keep writing this how you are, it'll be great.
I really like the starting of this story! Here's an idea you might consider when you continue. The dispatcher assumes Ms Johnson is overreacting when she describes the baby, and advises her to take the baby to the police station. As she enters the doors of the station with the baby, an officer notices something extremely strange about the her (the baby). Hope that helps!
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