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Review of I am an Echo  
Review by Lycan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Angels,

Just thought would pop in and have a read of some creations of yours.

I enjoyed the above poem as it represents so many individuals were they to be honest within themselves.

The only change in my limited experience that I would have possibly considered had the piece been mine would have been as follows.

Perhaps an alteration of the last section from :

I hope to break out the shadows, but now
I am an echo of thunder and light

Perhaps to add to the conclusion and finality of the poem

I yearn to break free of the shadows,
but for now remain
a mere echo...... of thunder and light

Please take no offence to my suggestion for each to their own, and you alone know its full representation relevance.

Steve
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Review of Your baby  
Review by Lycan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Jess,

Was perusing the site and came across your poem, though I do not have the academic standing to adequately review a piece, I thought would post my thoughts regardless.

After I read the first phrase, section or whatever the correct terminology is, I was temporarily lost, however all became clear upon progressing to the 2nd section. I quite liked the transition for what appeared at first to be human reference to then include material items as well. Being male I can relate to the whole I love my material items.

So congrats on a very nicely written piece that all falls into place and I look forward to more of your work..

Keep on writing.

Steve
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