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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is an interesting idea. If you are truly a teenager I am impressed. I only have a couple comments to make. First in this sentence “I was determined not to be the cause of the human race - or, really, what was left of it." It seems part of that thought may be missing. I still understood what you meant, but only after reading further. The last comment has to do with the use of commas. You might want to revisit the rules for when and how to separate thoughts. Overall I like the story and I think you should definitely continue writing it. I would like to see where it goes.
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