At first, I thought this was too dark and was worried for your emotional health. The last two lines, however, every time I re-read them, are stronger than all the others in the power of their possibilities, providing a fascinating balance. Ultimately entirely uplifting, and I will carry them through my day today. Thank you.
Recommend Canadian whiskey for the ant-stabbing, any old whiskey for the kangaroo. You left out harpoon. I'm a newbie: trust this is honest, encouraging and respectful.
I loved the beginning paragraphs and thought the concept was fascinating, also enjoyed the wrap-up paragraphs. I would have liked the dialogue to be tighter or more focused, or as deeply engaging as the prose. As it is, the dialogue is a bit too TV-show in the middle of the original and interesting paragraphs. Would have been happy to read more of Id's experiences. Thank you.
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