First I must say that I really liked the metaphor serpent! Itßs original, not cringe like others and fitted very well in the context of this story.
After that I was confused abour the HUGE WORDS THAT JUST SCREAMED WHILE READING. I find it unnecessary but it´s really up to you and your style :)
Over all I enjoyed reading it and love how she is brave enough to make the first move.
Well done,
Sophie Malloy
Wow...that was original. I would have loved to read a bit more from her perspective or what she was doing while sitting in the cinema.
Also I was a bit confused about their relationship. How is she first his ex-girlfriend and suddenly they are married like...how did that happen? Just because he licked her feet? Did she notice it and if so then how did she respond to it?
After all I loved the desciptions they were really realistic and on point.
Loved reading it,
Sophie Malloy
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they were really realistic and on point.